The sneaky fox.

 All week my class and I done writing about A fox in the woods and we had to adapt on the story starter and make our writing more interesting by using descriptive words and sentences. we had to use a bit of mystery in our writing to make it more interesting for the reader.

Here is my writing: 

Sneaky fox-

One cold noon a girl named Amelia was taking a walk in the forest and noticed

a sneaky little fox in the side of her eye. As the fox crawled closer Amelia heard a voice and startled and wanted to run but before she knew it she was surrounded.

As she noticed what was happening she fainted

in shock. As Amelia started to open her eyes she noticed she had been

taken to the foxes burrow. she started to realise she wasn’t

dreaming but

yet it still felt like a fantasy story. Niko the leader of the foxes was also human

but did not understand English because he was raised by the former

leader of the foxes who had found Niko when he was just a baby

crawling out of a crashed helicopter when his parents had died, the only

reason why Niko had survived was from the cushion of his mothers

body when the helicopter had crashed. Niko had many hobbies such

as knitting, and also being an amazing scavenger with those skills

he could make Amelia some new clothes.

It has been a few years now and Amelia has started

to understand what Niko is saying by his body

language and has even adapted to the fox

ways of life. Amelia is now living in the

woods with a second life in the city

5 miles away. Every morning Amelia gets

up at 3:00 in the morning and walks to her

work (The Morning cafe). One day Amelia's

fox-like senses knew that this particular

day would be different from all other days.

Later that day while Amelia was at work her

mind was starting to tell her something was

up and started to worry. By the end of her

shift she ran home as fast as she could,

when she got home she wondered were

the sneaky fox had gone as she turned

around she saw a tall figure stand up

from a crawling position, as Amelia was

in confusion she stared closer into the

figures eyes and recognized the shiny

blue sparkle that reminded her of her

childhood, as he got closer Amelia got

a burst of happiness that felt like her

lost younger brother that had died in a

car crash 12 years ago on a nearby road.

As Amelia realized she had found her

brother her heart dropped,  the one sneaky fox that had started all this fantasy land.  THE END. Author-Rani McConnell

If you want you can give me feedback or feed for word 

if you want to make my writing more interesting or just do some stuff that you liked about my writing.

What I liked-I liked my descriptive words.

What I can improve on-I can work more on my mystery.